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The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how much people are earned in average in the seven Britain
cities
. The data provided in pounds sterling and compare the
salaries
 between five big towns in England and two large
cities
 in Scotland. It is
noyicable
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noticeable
, that the
higher
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highest
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 amount of money is paid in capital of
Englans
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England
, London and the lowest in Birmingham.
Dispite
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Despite
 the
salaries
are
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being
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veried
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varied
 from region to region, there is no strong correlation between the number of the observed people and the level of their salary. The largest average
salaries
 are
registrated
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registered
 in
london
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London
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, England, where people are paid 33,634, followed by Cambridge with 29,854 pounds sterling. The third place can be shared between
the
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apply
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Bristol in England and Edinburgh in Scotland, with
appoximately
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approximately
 the same level of average yearly payment of 27,828 and 27,592 respectively. It is
noteworthly
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noteworthy
 that despite the smallest number of
observation
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observations
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, Edinburgh
still
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is still
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 among the highly earned
salaries
 region among the presented. The
cities
 with the lowest wages are Birmingham, Manchester and Glasgow,
accounted
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accounting
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 for roughly 25,5 , 26 and 26,1 thousand pound sterling respectively.
Compare
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Compared
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 to London, the
avarage
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average
 wages in those
cities
 are only three quarters,
however
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however,
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 they are not substantially lower
while
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apply
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compare
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compared
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 to the rest of the places, with
gap
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the gap
a gap
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 between 2.5 to 4 thousand pound sterling only.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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