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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
#bar #world #illiteracy #rates #region #gender #year
The diagram compares six regions, namely developed countries, Latin America, East
Asia
, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
, in terms of
worldilliteracy
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world illiteracy
 for the
last
year
.  
Overall
,
while
 the most illiterate
males
 and
females
 were in South
Asia
, the least number of illiterate people were in developed countries.   As the bar chart shows,
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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ones
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in South
Asia
 were most illiterate,
males
were
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at 34% and
females
 at 55%. The lowest
index
 was in developed countries; the male
figure
 was at 2% and the female
figure
 was at 4%.
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 the Arab States,
females's
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the females's
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index
 was at 53%,
males
'
index
 was at 28%. Regarding sub-Saharan Africa, the female
figure
 was at 57%,
whereas
 the male
figure
 was much lower at 32%
last
year
. In East Oceania, 8% of
males
 were illiterate; the female
figure
 was
at
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20%. 10% of Latin American
males
 were illiterate
last
year
.
This
index
 was a little higher in
females
 13% the previous
year
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