The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The diagram compares six regions, namely developed countries, Latin America, East
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, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
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, in terms of
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world illiteracy
for the
last
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year
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.  
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,
while
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the most illiterate
males
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and
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were in South
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, the least number of illiterate people were in developed countries.   As the bar chart shows,
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and
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in South
Asia
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were most illiterate,
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at 34% and
females
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at 55%. The lowest
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was in developed countries; the male
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was at 2% and the female
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was at 4%.
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the Arab States,
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index
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was at 53%,
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'
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was at 28%. Regarding sub-Saharan Africa, the female
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was at 57%,
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the male
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was much lower at 32%
last
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year
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. In East Oceania, 8% of
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were illiterate; the female
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was
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20%. 10% of Latin American
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were illiterate
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year
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.
This
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was a little higher in
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13% the previous
year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, year, males, females, index, figure with synonyms.
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