The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The bar graph below
illustrated
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the percentage of money consumed in a variety of fields, which took place in one country that started in 1968 until 2018. At first glance at the line graph, nutrients approximately equal
the
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third of their incomes in the first
year
. Another noticeable feature, household products remained stable during the whole period. Interestingly, food dramatically increased by the end of the study.
To begin
with, in 1968,
the
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leisure goods
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the percentage of the same category in 2018,
while
food
mostly
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consumed during the same
year
.
In addition
, housing, transport, and leisure, in 2018m
equaled
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greater
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percentage
comparing
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with the
former
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previous
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year
.
Moreover
, personal goods, fossil
fuel
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fuels
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, and clothing in the first
year
were more
demanded
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than
the
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second one.
Additionally
, both the percentages were swing during
the
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both years.
Also
, on
one
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hand, food reached its peak in 1968.
On the other hand
, leisure
hitted
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the
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highest point in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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