The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The bar graph below
illustrated
the percentage of money consumed in a variety of fields, which took place in one country that started in 1968 until 2018.
At first glance at the line graph, nutrients approximately equal Wrong verb form
illustrates
the
third of their incomes in the first Correct article usage
a
year
. Another noticeable feature, household products remained stable during the whole period. Interestingly, food dramatically increased by the end of the study.
To begin
with, in 1968, the
leisure goods Correct article usage
apply
overcome
the percentage of the same category in 2018, Wrong verb form
overcame
while
food mostly
consumed during the same Add a missing verb
was mostly
year
. In addition
, housing, transport, and leisure, in 2018m equaled
Change the spelling
equalled
greater
percentage Correct article usage
a greater
comparing
with the Wrong verb form
compared
former
Correct word choice
previous
year
.
Moreover
, personal goods, fossil fuel
, and clothing in the first Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
year
were more demanded
than Change preposition
in demand
the
second one. Change preposition
in the
Additionally
, both the percentages were swing during the
both years. Remove the article
apply
Also
, on one
hand, food reached its peak in 1968. Correct article usage
the one
On the other hand
, leisure hitted
Correct your spelling
hit
the
highest point in 2018.Change the word
its
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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