The diagrams below show a community center's changes in the last ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a community center's changes in the last ten years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the changes that the community center
was
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has
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undergoed
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undergone
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in the past 10 years. As it might be seen, the changes were quite
drastical
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drastic
drastically
, since not only almost all rooms were shifted, but
also
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the new
were
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ones were
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added. The diagram clearly Indicates that 10 years ago the quantity of the indoors outnumbered the recent number of them. It is associated with the fact, that now
instead
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of the offices and a storage room, there is a big cafeteria. It is
also
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easily
spoted
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spotted
, that as
the
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time passed, the parking area remained
it's
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in's
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position
as well as
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hall
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the hall
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, kitchen and the entrance. Delving into more details, it can be noticed that the number of office rooms was drastically reduced from 4 rooms which were to the right of the hall to 1 room only, which is located before the hall.
Also
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, the garden was abolished and
instead
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of
it
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it,
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there is
a
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indoor sports room. It seems that there was a positive impact on the
center
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centre
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workers' productivity, since now it is more
comfort
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comfortable
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to work
that
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than
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it used to be.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • community center
  • renovation
  • layout
  • features
  • modifications
  • additions
  • facilities
  • functionality
  • accessibility
  • sustainable initiatives
  • eco-friendly
  • development
  • functional improvements
  • visual enhancements
  • local population
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