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The table details the international tourist arivals in millions in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010 and the changes (in percentages) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The table details the international tourist arivals in millions in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010 and the changes (in percentages) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
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The illustrates the changes in visitor numbers from overseas to nine
countries
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 in two consecutive years, namely 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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, the expectations of France and Hong Kong. whether other
countries
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 were visited more in 2010.
In addition
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, France was the most popular in all the years and Germany
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 the most growth Regarding the most visited nations in 2009, France topped the list and remained unchanged in the next year, with about 76
million
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 people.
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 the number of
visitors
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 to the US was 66
million
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, there were the same 55
million
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visitors
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 to the UK and Spain in 2009, 11
million
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 higher than in Italy.In 2010, all four
countries
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 increased to equivalent to 1,55% to 3,6% growth. With regard to the remaining
countries
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, the number of foreign
visitors
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 in Turkey was 33
million
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, 11
million
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 higher than in China and outnumbered Germany,
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 by the same margin. Turning into 2010, when the decrease in these three
countries
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 was 12
million
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visitors
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 with their relative growth being 33%, 55% and 109%, respectively. Hongkong was the least attractive destination to
visitors
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 with its number declining from 10 to 9
million
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 in 2010, representing a drop of 11%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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