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Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do the advantages of this for their study outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's era, some students who graduate from school want to
travel
 or
work
 for a period of time rather than going
immedately
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immediately
 to
university
.
This
 action has some pros that will outweigh the cons.
This
 essay intends to express
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
travel
 or
work
 before starting
university
.
To begin
 with, it is better to have some
work
 experience before starting a faculty.
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Because
, it helps the person to learn better that subject and makes the person familiar with lessons.
Hence
, the student will learn the subject only with
one
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a
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time
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one-time
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 review or
one time
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one-time
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 lecturing by the instructor.
For instance
, some
people
 before starting the faculty of Pharmacy
work
 in a small clinic at least they learn how to inject or how to bandage a wound.
In addition
, generally
traveling
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travelling
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 is a good experience in all aspects of our life. Traveling
contribue
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contributes
 to our learning as well because
while
 visiting
the
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foreign countries we will
expereince
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experience
 new adventures
additionally
in
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on
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 some trips we will face
with
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delimma. The
people
 who have not
travel
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travelled
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 in their entire life they do not know about hardship and
they
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the
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people
 who have not seen hard
situation
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situations
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 will not try
become
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to become
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 stronger and will
mot
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not
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 pay enough attention to their
educatio
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education
. To exemplify
this
 statement, today most
of
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rich and
succeed
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people
 have passed a hard situation and
traveling
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travelling
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also
 has a lot of
difficulteis
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difficulties
. Summing up, many
people
 are eager to
work
 or
travel
 for a
while
befor
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before
 starting
university
.
According to
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 points in
this
eaasy
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essay
 and my personal and logical
perceptions
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perceptions,
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 it is better to have some trips or
work
 experience
befor
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before
 starting
university
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • real-world experience
  • practical skills
  • time management
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving abilities
  • horizons
  • creativity
  • adaptability
  • gap year
  • academic rigor
  • financial constraints
  • long-term educational goals
  • academic pursuits
  • academic ambitions
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