IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

many people think that interviews are not the best way to assess the suitability of a candidate for a position. To what extent do you agree or disagree? agree = lie, limited qualities disagree = proved it works, ideal q to discover personality& qualities

#people #interviews #suitability #candidate #position #qualities #works #q #personality&
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
meeting
candidates
Use synonyms
 is a common way to choose an employee. In
this
Linking Words
 report, I will go through the merits and demerits of
this
Linking Words
 method, and
then
Linking Words
 allow me to share my point of view.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, meeting
candidates
Use synonyms
 is an easy, effective, beneficial, and
efficiant
Correct your spelling
efficient
 way to choose an attractive person;
as a consequence
Linking Words
, many companies depend on
this
Linking Words
 method to hire workers.
Firstly
Linking Words
, it proved its
efficiance
Correct your spelling
efficiency
 many times. For
further
Linking Words
 explanation, studies show that for a long period of time, facilities
relaid
Verb problem
rely
show examples
 on meeting and asking people to
determin
Correct your spelling
determine
 who is the most suitable one for a specific spot, and all of these foundations, indeed, succeed
such
Linking Words
 as Samsung, Aramco, and Google.
Secondly
Linking Words
,
intereviewers
Correct your spelling
interviewers
 can recognize the suitable person by asking. Because they study the body language
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and ask ideal questions to discover personalities
as well as
Linking Words
 unique
skills
Use synonyms
 that the
candidates
Use synonyms
 have.
Besides
Linking Words
 that, a report illustrated that many interviewers acknowledged that meeting the person,either face-to-face or online, is a helpful way to discover their interests, goals,
skills
Use synonyms
, and qualities.
Althogh
Correct your spelling
Although
 the points mentioned above are influencing, there are reverse points that hold equal influence. The first point
that
Add a missing verb
is that
show examples
 it is easy to lie during the meeting.
For example
Linking Words
, many people post on social media
such
Linking Words
 as Twitter, Facebook, and Instagram that they lied and they got satisfied jobs because it is extremely hard to catch
proffesional
Correct your spelling
professional
liers
Correct your spelling
liars
show examples
.
In addition
Linking Words
, many managers said that they regret hiring some workers because
the
Correct your spelling
they
show examples
 lately recognized that they do not
desearve
Correct your spelling
desire
 their spots.
Additionally
Linking Words
,
interviewes
Correct your spelling
interviews
interviewees
interviewers
 concentrate on
limited
Change the article
a limited
the limited
show examples
 number of
skills
Use synonyms
 like communication, problem-solving, and leadership;
however
Linking Words
, these
skills
Use synonyms
 are not enough, so they need
another ways
Replace the adjective
another way
other ways
show examples
 to examine the other important
skills
Use synonyms
, and many managers acknowledge that even though the staff has some good qualities, they hold many negative ones that affect the whole work. In conclusion, even though meeting
candidates
Use synonyms
 has many disadvantages, difficulties, and negatives, doing
that is
Linking Words
 helpful, useful, and beneficial.
As a result
Linking Words
, I completely disagree with the statement mentioned above.
Submitted by haneenalnetaif on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction Clarity
Make sure to directly address the question in your introduction for a clearer stance.
Linking Words
Use more varied linking words to improve the flow of your essay and make connections between ideas clearer.
Grammar and Spelling
Be cautious of minor grammatical errors and typos. Proofreading can help eliminate these mistakes and improve your overall score.
Structure
Your essay structure is clear, with a good balance of arguments for both sides of the discussion.
Examples
You effectively provided specific examples to support your points, enhancing the persuasiveness of your argument.
Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarises your argument, clearly stating your position.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: