The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram illustrates a traditional system for converting dirty
water
to clean
water
.
It's depends
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It depends
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on natural materials for purifying
water
,
also
this
system
consist
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consists
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of two storage drums.
Firstly
, the tank for filtration of dirty
water
by natural substances
as
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sand, charcoal and gravel.
It's connects
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to the drums by
plastic
Correct article usage
a plastic
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barrel.
Whereas
, the other rank acts receiver for the cleaned
water
that's suitable for drinking and
using
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use
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • filtration system
  • gravel layer
  • sand layer
  • charcoal layer
  • impurities
  • boiling process
  • bacteria
  • microorganisms
  • condensation stage
  • purified
  • contaminated water
  • potable water
  • transformation
  • capture
  • remove large impurities
  • remove small impurities
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