The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram illustrates a traditional system for converting dirty
water
to clean water
.
It's depends
on natural materials for purifying Change the verb form
It depends
water
, also
this
system consist
of two storage drums.
Change the verb form
consists
Firstly
, the tank for filtration of dirty water
by natural substances as
sand, charcoal and gravel. Correct quantifier usage
such as
It's connects
to the drums by Change the verb form
It's connected
plastic
barrel.
Correct article usage
a plastic
Whereas
, the other rank acts receiver for the cleaned water
that's suitable for drinking and using
.Replace the word
use
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