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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area ofBritain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area ofBritain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the
budget
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 allocated for the police department.
Whereas
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, the two pie charts compare the capital distribution.
Overall
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, the National government was the major source of income
while
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, in both years majority of the
money
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 was distributed among police officers and other staff salaries.
However
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, construction and transportation utilized the same
amount
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. To commence with, In 2017, the total
budget
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 was 304.7 million euros. the military contributed a huge
amount
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 to the
budget
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 which was 175.5m and local taxes 91.2m.
However
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, the
money
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 was spent on imparted salaries which were recorded at 75 and the lowest
amount
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 ratio was witnessed at 8% for the technological equipment and tools in the police department.
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, the construction and vehicles were the same proportion showed in both the years. Looking towards the rest of the information, In 2018, there was an increase in the total
amount
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 of
budget
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 which constituted 14% as compared to the previous year.
while
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 the national government rose up to 2% and 11% in local taxes meanwhile other grants show the same
amount
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 of
money
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 in both periods was 38m. After passing a term the capital spent on salaries declined by 6% and
money
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 spent on technology significantly surged to 6%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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