Some people regard video games as useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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technological era, myriad
people
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deem that if
video
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games
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played
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by
the
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apply

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people
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than
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then

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it succour
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they will gain

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them
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their

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education knowledge
while
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other
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others

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believe that it has
negative
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a negative

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impact on
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people
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. I believe playing
video
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games
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in tremendous
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amounts
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amount
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has
a
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apply

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more pros. I will elaborate on my notion in forthcoming paragraphs. By installing distinct
game
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applications humans get positive
outcome
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outcomes

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.
Firstly
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, if the
video
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game
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is related to mathematical numbers,
than
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then

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it
enhance
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enhances

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the calculation power of the student and
people
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such
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as
games
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like
puzzle
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Puzzle

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and
sudoko
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Sudoko

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.
Secondly
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,
game
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trains
people
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to think
logical
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logically

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as well about the future
plan
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plans

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of their
life
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lives

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.
On the other hand
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, it has more
drawback
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drawbacks

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by spending
to
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too

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much time on the computer screen. It not only
change
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changes

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the posture of the person but
also
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cause
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causes

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the
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a

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detremental
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detrimental

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effect on
the
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apply

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personal health by sitting in
the
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apply

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one position for
prolonged
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a prolonged

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period.
As a
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result
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result,

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players might have less physical fitness if children avoid
to play
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playing

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outdoor activities. An outstanding example is that most
of
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apply

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the
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people
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suffer from
the
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obesity and other
dieases
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diseases

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like
diabities
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diabetes

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, heart problems and stress.
Morover
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Moreover

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, it declines their social interaction skill which may cause
disadvatage
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disadvantages

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in future, if they
wanted
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want

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to start
the
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business.
In addition
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student
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a student
the student

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might get
distracte
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distracted

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from their
primarary
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primary

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goal if
thy
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they

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attracted by the
video
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game
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.
For instance
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, educater
playes
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play

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a
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games
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instant
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instead

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of doing their homework
and
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apply

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which turns out
a
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an

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unstatisfactry result
of
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for

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their academic year. In recapitulation, In my
opinion
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opinion,

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it
cause
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causes

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the
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a

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perilious
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perilous

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problem
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problems

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beacuse
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because

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it might put their future and their health in
the
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problem by playing a
video
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game
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constantly.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines your opinion and the structure of the essay to follow, helping readers understand your stance from the beginning.
Sentence Variety & Transitions
For a higher score, work on the variety and complexity of your sentences to enhance clarity and coherence throughout your essay. Adding transitions can better indicate the relationship between ideas.
Specific Examples
Integrating more detailed and specific examples can strengthen your arguments, making your essay more persuasive and engaging. Try to include real-world situations or statistics that clearly support your points.
Spelling & Grammar
Watch out for spelling and grammar errors, as these can distract from your message. Regular practice and review can improve accuracy.
Paragraph Development
Focus on developing your paragraphs with clear topic sentences that outline the main idea, followed by supporting details and examples. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea related to the prompt.
Clear Opinion
You provided a clear opinion on the topic, guiding the reader through your viewpoint effectively.
Balanced Discussion
Your essay addressed both sides of the argument, which is critical for a balanced discussion. This approach enhances the depth of your analysis.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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