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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the statistics on European health expenditure in three different years, 2002, 2007 and 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are not
much
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many
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 changes in all
countries
 throughout the period. Switzerland
is
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apply
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by far
utilize
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utilizes
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their
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its
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 money on health more than other
countries
,
whereas
 Estonia
spend
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 the least.
To begin
 with, Estonia, Poland, and Lithuania were the three
countries
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that spend
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spend
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spent
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 the least at around 6% of
GDP
. Estonia remained unchanged at 3% of
GDP
,
while
 the other two
countries
 stayed constant in 2002 and 2007,
thereafter
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and thereafter
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 experienced a minimal increase of 1% in 2012. In all provided
period
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periods
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, Switzerland is the country
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that spend
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spend
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spends
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 highest ,with approximately 11% of
GDP
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the GDP
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. Followed closely behind is Belgium at 10% of
GDP
. In 2007,
France
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France's
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 percentage had
rise
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risen
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 to the same
levels
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level
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 as
Switzerland
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Switzerland's
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.
However
, it dropped to nearly 9% in 2012. The remaining
countries
 witnessed
slightly
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slight
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 change over a decade, with around 8-10%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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