One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - apologise for missing the birthday celebration; - explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend; - and say what you would like to do to show that you are sorry.

Dear Bayu, I am writing
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regarding your
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birthday
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am really apologize
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that
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forgot to
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attend
your party
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several activities. I understand your
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special day is important for memorise because
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did not attend so sorry
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than before and your dream quickly you get As you know
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have a
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activity at home and assist my parents,
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catch up deadline at my company because very crucial,
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must
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finish
reporting data
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and write a journal.
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so far my father has
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headache
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go to
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hospital
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consultation and take some
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medicine
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am promise
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to
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you
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would visited
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your home after
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have a few
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must make
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will bring you some reward regard
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was
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late give you
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will invite you
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General
Make sure to attend to spelling errors, especially in key words such as 'birthday' and 'attend'. This can greatly improve the clarity of your message.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider using clearer and stronger transitions between ideas. For example, when shifting from apologizing to explaining your absence, a phrase like 'The reason for my absence is' could provide a smoother transition.
Coherence & Cohesion
For a stronger structure, organize your letter into clear paragraphs: one for your apology, one to explain your absence, and another to offer how you'll make up for it. This helps the reader follow your points more easily.
Task Achievement
To fully achieve the task, make sure to directly address all parts of the prompt. While you did apologize and explain, ensuring that your way of making up is clearly outlined and heartfelt will strengthen your response.
General
Consider adjusting the tone to be slightly more formal by avoiding contractions ('I am' instead of 'i am') and using complete words ('hospital' instead of 'hospil', 'medicine' instead of 'madicent'). This suits the context of an apologetic letter better.
Content
Your heartfelt apology and intention to make amends are clear.
Content
Including specific details about your reasons for missing the birthday provides credibility to your explanation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heartfelt
  • unavoidable circumstances
  • last-minute emergencies
  • caught up
  • misjudging
  • make amends
  • thoughtful
  • exclusively
  • personal letter
  • value
  • regret
  • special day out
  • arranging a surprise
  • friendship
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