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The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of
students
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 (14-16 years old) learning a modern foreign
language
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 in an English-speaking country and the top three famous foreign languages studied by
students
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. Units are measured in
percentage
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 in both charts.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that both charts contain a comparison between 1984 and 2007. In the first chart, the
girls
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students
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 dominated the class throughout the given period.
Furthermore
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, French is the most popular foreign
language
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 either in 1984 or 2007. In terms of the student's gender, the majority of
students
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 are
girls
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. In the first period, the
girls
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'
students
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 stood at almost 50 and the boys'
students
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 started at exactly 30.
Thereafter
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 in 2007, the
percentage
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 of
the
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girls
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'
students
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 witnessed a little degrading to precisely 40 and
similarly
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, the boys'
students
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also
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 decreased by about 5. Regarding the foreign languages studied, the most chosen
language
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 which is French started at 50,
while
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 German and Spanish began at 20 and about 5, respectively.
However
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, the popularity of the French
language
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 dropped significantly to approximately 25 in 2007. Not only that, but the
percentage
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 of German
language
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also
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 went down to just above 10.
In contrast
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, Spanish experienced a small growth to 10 in the
last
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 period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, language, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • modern foreign languages
  • English-speaking country
  • demographic
  • participation
  • gender disparities
  • trends
  • popularity rankings
  • analyzing
  • implications
  • cultural factors
  • economic ties
  • global job market
  • increasingly globalized
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