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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table represents the information related to the regional
fish
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 catchment and imports into Perth
in
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apply
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Australia between 2004
to
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and
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 2014.
Overall
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, there was a fluctuation in
fish
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 supply
into
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in
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 the country by local catching and foreign
purchase
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purchases
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 over the given decade. looking into details, in 2009 the total
fish
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 amount in the country was the highest reaching 8949 metric tons. As regards local fishing, it started at 26677.7 metric tons in 2004,
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 increased significantly during the next 4 years and reached a peak at 8136.2 metric tons. During the rest of the period, the regional fishing amount experienced a gradual drop and reached a trough in 2012. Next ,there was a gradual rise during
next
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the next
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 couple of years. Meanwhile, the imports of
fish
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 saw a similar kind of variation, but the peak was observed at 1204 in 2010. It is interesting to note that
at the end
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 of the observation period purchasing from foreign
counties
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countries
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 showed a significant decrease compared to the previous year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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