The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The graph below illustrates the average household's weekly spending in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, it is obvious that money spent on eating was the highest in 1968. Linking Words
Whereas
people in 2018 tend to spend more on their accommodation and comfort.
In the beginning, expenditure seems to be the highest on food consumption in 1968 at 35% compared with 2018 which is almost 14% half the former rate. Linking Words
On the other hand
, spending on rent and housing was elevated from 10% in 1968 to 19% in 2018. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the diverse activities in 2018 have made individuals pay extra credit which is about 23% more than 9% in 1986. Families goods seem to be the same average 7% in the two years.
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Moreover
, with the city's development people are now spending more money on transport than in the past approximately 14% in 2018 with 6% in 1968. Personal belongings and wares in 1968 were more preferable than in 2018 and almost 8 to 10% of an individual's salary goes on it competing with 4 to 5 % in the future. Linking Words
Finally
, the least amount of wages is spent on fuel and power in 1968 and 2018 at 4%.Linking Words
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