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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The table illustrates the cost of
water
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of
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in
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 various cities in Australia
such
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 as Adelaide, Brisbane,
Melbourne
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,
Perth
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the average money
was
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apply
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spend
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spent
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 by
house hold
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households
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 in
Perth
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 is the highest at $332.
While
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,
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apply
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 the bill per
house hold
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household
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 is lowest at $253 in
Melbourne
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. It is apparent that the price of
water
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usaged
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usage
 less than 125
KL
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 of Adelaide and
Perth
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are
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is
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 equal to $0.42 per
kiloliter
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.
Next,
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the cost in
Melbourne
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, Brisbane and
Sydney
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approximately
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is approximately
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 $0.78, $0.81 and $0.98 per
kiloliter
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, respectively.
Additionally
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, the cost of
water
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usaged
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usage
more
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of more
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 than 125
KL
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 of
Perth
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 is the toppest at $1.50 per
kiloliter
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. And followed by Adelaide
about
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at about
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 $1.00 per
kilometer
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kilometre
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.
Moreover
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, the
price
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prices
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 in
Sydney
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, Brisbane and
Melbourne
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 stay at $0.98, $0.84 and $0.78 per
kiloliter
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, respectively. In conclusion, the amount of
water
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useage
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used
of
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in
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 many cities in Australia was calculated by the range of 125
KL
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, if people use
the
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apply
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water
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 over 125
KL
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, the price per unit will expensive than
use
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using
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 under 125
KL
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 except in
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, melbourne, perth, sydney, kl, kiloliter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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