The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014.
The illustrated bar chart depicts the exports of Scotland to other countries of the world and
UK
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the UK
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. Generally, we can the that Business and Restaurant services are noticeably more than
another spheres
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. We can see from the data that exports for
rest
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the rest
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of the world
is
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are
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considerably different from exports to the UK,
for instance
, in
retail
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the retail
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sphere
this
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these
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numbers
differs
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for
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almost eight times with indexes 8.2 per
cent
and 1.1 per
cent
respectively.
By contrast
, in
electrical
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engineering
sphere
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the situation is
opposite
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the opposite
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, with 2.3 per
cent
and 4 per
cent
for
world’s
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the world’s
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countries and
UK
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the UK
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respectively.
Furthermore
, there are slight
distinction
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distinctions
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between several spheres like manufacturing of food and other manufacturing with numbers of 5.8 and 5.9 per
cent
respectively. The least impact for the export is given by agricultural, forestry, fishing and mining sphere with only three per
cent
overall
.
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