The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart provides key information about the

buy

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buying

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and

drink

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drinking

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habits for

coffee

and tea for Australian individuals by studying in various cities

Sydeny

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Sydney

Melnoume

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Melbourne

Brisbane

Adeleide

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Adelaide

and Hobart.

Overall

, It is clear from the graph that

Melboume

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Melbourne

showed a

siginificant

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significant

ratio

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people

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who visit

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visit

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visited

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a cafe for

coffee

or tea in

last

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the last

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month.

In addition

, Hobrat showed a

curcial

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crucial

percentages in bought instant

coffee

Whereas

, Both

Brisbane

and Adelaide showed a modest proportion in bought fresh

coffee

last

4 weeks.

To begin

with, both

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Melboume

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and Hobart at the peak of people went the cafe for

coffee

and tea around 64%,

While

in other terms Harbort showed a

high

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higher

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ratio

than

Melboume

around 55%.

However

. Sydney showed a critical

increace

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increase

in crowd

visit

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visits

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to the

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the

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apply

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cafe

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cafes

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in the same period almost 61%.

While

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apply

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Brisbane

and Adelaide showed a minor

ratio

comparing

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compared

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to the other cities. In terms of people

prefer

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who prefer

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bought

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buy

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fresh

coffee

, Sydney

take

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takes

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the lead

approximately

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at approximately

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45%.

melboume

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Melbourne

come

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comes

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second by 43%.

Additionally

, Both

Brisbane

and Adelaide showed a similar

ratio

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34%. Harbort City 37%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brisbane, melboume, ratio with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.

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4Word repetition
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28Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

181 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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