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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The supplied bar chart indicates data about what
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the family
purchase
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 from their wage every seven days in 1968 and in 2018. It can be clearly seen that
,
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the graph illustrates two special years with black for 1968 and grey for 2018 that demonstrates the
porporation
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proportion
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 of spending money. As regards food in 1968,it was the highest percentage of buying,
however
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 the amount of money which was spent
for
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 fuel and power was the least in that year. In 2018 the average of money spent
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 leisure was almost %20,(which was the highest amount).
in
contrast
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 families spent just under %5 weekly
for
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 fuel
and
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power and personal goods
that
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 was the minimum measurement in 2018.
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