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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart displays how much
electricity
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 was produced and consumed by 10 nations within the year 2024.
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, the
production
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 of
electricity
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 surpassed its consumption in all countries except for Germany. There are five countries that produce more than 700
billion
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kWh
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 in 2024 and the highest producer amongst these five countries is China, with a total
electricity
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production
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 of 5.398
billion
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kWh
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. The United States was in second place with a total
electricity
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 generated of around 4.000
billion
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KWh
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 followed by Russia, Japan, and India with a total
electricity
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 produced of less than 20
percent
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 of China’s
production
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 respectively. The remaining five nations generated not more than 700
billion
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kWh
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 with the Republic of Korea as the
last
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 country, producing a total
electricity
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 of less than 500
billion
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kWh
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. With regard to consumption, China
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 ranked first with total usage of
electricity
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 of more than 5000
billion
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kWh
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. The sequence of ranking of
electricity
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 consumption is the same as the
electricity
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production
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 ranking, except that Germany consumed more
electricity
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 than it produced, making it experience an
electricity
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 deficit of around 50
billion
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kWh
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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