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write a referral letter to an orthopedic surgeon

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I am writing to refer Mr. Taylor, a
38 -years-old
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38-year-old
 gardener, who has been suffering from chronic left
knee
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pain
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.
According to
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 new MRI findings that
shows
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 damaged meniscal cartilage, he requires your urgent evaluation for any need
to
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for
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 meniscal repairment.
Mr.
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Mr
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 Taylor’s problem has been started since 9 months back after twisting
the
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his
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knee
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 in a tennis game. At
first
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first,
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 the
pain
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 was manageable with some
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pain killers
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painkillers
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. He came 6 months after the injury
on
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in
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 August, with left
knee
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pain
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 and local tenderness on
medial
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the medial
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 joint line. The
X ray
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 was normal and he was requested to take NSAID and advised to get
review
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a review
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 in the clinic if there is no improvement. After 3 months he came again today
while
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 he was limping. He still had
a
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apply
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pain
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 and swelling in his left
knee
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. He
concerns
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 the injury is inhibiting his productive work and he worried about that. Related to
this
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 chronic resistant
pain
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 in
left
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the left
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knee
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 MRI was done. The report showed us a damaged meniscal cartilage. I would appreciate it if you could visit Mr. Taylor for any surgical
repairment
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 and removal of
damaged
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the damaged
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 meniscus. Yours sincerely, Doctor,

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Greeting and Closing
Make sure to include a proper greeting and closing to add a formal touch to your referral letters.
Logical Structure
For a clearer structure, explicitly divide your letter into paragraphs, each with a unique purpose (e.g., introduction, patient history, request for evaluation).
Complete Response
Ensure concise and relevant details are included, focusing on information crucial for the referral. Avoid unnecessary medical histories or personal details unless directly relevant to the case.
Writing Tone
Use a formal and professional tone throughout the letter. Avoid using colloquial language or overly casual expressions.
Task Achievement
The letter provides a clear history of the patient's condition and succinctly explains the need for referral, demonstrating a good understanding of task requirements.
Coherence
Progression of ideas from the patient's initial injury to their current condition shows a coherent approach to presenting information.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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