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Many cities have installed cameras in public places in order to reduce crime. However, some people think that those cameras restrict our privacy. Do you think the advantages of this system outweigh the disadvantages?

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Without any doubt, public cameras are becoming ubiquitous
as well as
 playing a vital role
to deter
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 crimes of any kind. Certain individuals hold the idea that they permeate their private lives.
However
, from my perspective,
this
 small technology ought to be everywhere in order to their
benefits
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. The first thing that comes to mind when talking about cameras is safety. These recording devices are
effectively
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to deter
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 criminals from committing their
crime
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crimes
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 by recording their faces,
while
 a huge number of handicaps will appear if the city does not have any video recorder in their streets.
For instance
, nowadays, crimes spread widely in some communities that neglect security and lead to numerous
of
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death issues in the worst cases; meanwhile,
this
 is not a noticeable problem with others who tend to
unsure
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 that every area of the city is covered. In today's modernized era, and
due to
 the substantial advancement of technology, recording devices can be the police eyes in public and even take their
places
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 over.
although
,
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 it could increase
the
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unemployment in one hand, the number of human mistakes will diminish. A perfect illustration of
this
 is when criminals choose overlooked areas that
underprivileged
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secureity
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security
 in usual,
whereas
 having a cutting-edge video recorder can do a lot. In conclusion, it is obvious that in current days, policemen cannot do anything by themselves.
Therefore
, using high-tech devices is something significant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance
  • deterrence
  • apprehension
  • infringement
  • omnipresence
  • law enforcement
  • evidence gathering
  • privacy concerns
  • surveillance state
  • unwarranted surveillance
  • psychological impact
  • paranoia
  • crime investigation
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