The charts below show information about the annual profits, the final stock prices and the market share of five different video game companies in 2022.

The charts below show information about the annual profits, the final stock prices and the market share of five different video game companies in 2022.
The above chart
dilineates
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delineates
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annual gaming revenue generated by ten established gaming companies
world wide
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throughout the year 2022.
According to
the data, Sony has a significant
profit
comparing
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to all the nine. Tencent and Nintendo seem to be rivals with
no
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much
profit
difference.
It is clear that
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sony
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has
ead
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more
revenue than
rest
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the rest
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of the companies with a
profit
of 28.2
billion
USD.
Then
comes
microsoft
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, which has
$
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16.2
billion
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.
Third
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position is held by
tencent
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which has $13.9
billion
. Fourth comes
nintendo
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Nintendo
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with just 0.1
percent
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per cent
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behind
tencent
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Tencent
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.
In contrast
,
last
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three positions were held by
take-two interactive
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,
bandai namco
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Bandai Namco
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and
ubisoft
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. The
ubisoft
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has the least
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in the year, with $2.5
billion
. Activision
blizzard
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Blizzard
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, EA and epic games
holds
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fifth, sixth and seventh positions with a
profit
of $7.4, $7 and $5.8
billion
respectively.
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