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some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of High School programs( for example working for charity improving the neighborhood for teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #community #services #part #school #programs #charity #neighborhood #sports #children
According to
 some, during high
school
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school,
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 students should be encouraged to do unpaid
work
 for the welfare of
community
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the community
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. I firmly believe that it should be mandatory for every student to
work
 in
coodination
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coordination
 with respective
programms
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programmes
programs
 for community service.
To begin
 with, school is the place where a student
learn
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 different values and basic knowledge so, our schools should include both curricular and co-curricular activities
such
 as participating in charity
programms
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programmes
programs
, teaching sports to younger children and working in old care homes.
For example
, planting a tree to make
environment
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the environment
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 green and
pollution free
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pollution-free
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 is a motive
that is
 initiated by many countries and most
of
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it
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apply
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students and
yourth
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youth
is
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are
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 participating in it with
this
 the benefits are that children should know
importance
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the importance
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to keep
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of keeping
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 surroundings neat and clean.
Furthermore
, groups of students should be allocated different social activities that should be unpaid because
this
 will incur a sense of responsibility in them that community service is
there
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 responsibility.
To sum up
, it is very important for our youth to
work
fot
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for
the
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a
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 good cause because they are the ones who are the asset of the country so they should be involved in productive
work
.
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Your essay shows a clear position throughout, which is excellent. Try to develop your ideas more comprehensively with more detailed examples to strengthen your arguments.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • empathy
  • civic engagement
  • practical skills
  • real-world experiences
  • invaluable
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  • suitable placements
  • quality assurance
  • promote engagement
  • enthusiasm
  • meaningful
  • impactful
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