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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates statistics regarding
British
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how British
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 unemployed individuals
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who utilized
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utilized
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who utilized
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 their time in the previous year, categorized
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into
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in
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into
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 14 activities.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the majority of
the
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apply
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UK men spent their
times
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time
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 searching for a new job in the morning and watching TV in the afternoon. Meanwhile, British women dedicated all day
for
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 housework.
To begin
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 with, in the morning, 22% of British men searched for their new job.
This
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 is closely followed by shopping and housework, with roughly 20%.
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, in the afternoon, approximately 15% of men preferred to watch TV and
gardened
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. The remaining activities made up less than a tenth.
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, most women in Britain predominantly spent their
times
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time
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 doing housework, with a half in the morning and a fifth in the afternoon. Shopping ranked in the second largest proportion in both times.
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 at the early
of
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the
day
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day,
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 women used time
in finding
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to find
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 a new job, at the latter time they visited friends or relatives.
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