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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information about education, employment rate and average income for eight countries located in Europe in 2015.
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, in most of the
places
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 there was a strong correlation between the level of education and both
ability
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 to earn more money and to get a job. In terms of
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income, Norway led the list with 41,483
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, followed by Luxemburg, Austria and the UK with 34.320 , 20.945 and 20.945
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 respectively. As presented
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 the chart, the employment rates among
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aforementiond
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aforementioned
 regions are relatively high,
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 for roughly seven in
ten
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, with
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the exeption
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exeption
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exception
exemption
 of Luxemburg, where only 6.6 in
ten
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 people were
employeed
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employed
.
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 average the number of youngsters who had graduated college or university in those regions are four in
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, Austria
had
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registered
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a lower
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 indicator of three in
ten
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 citizens only. In stark contrast, among the states with low earnings,
such
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 as Bulgaria, Greece, Latvia and Portugal, the low level of
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employment
 was registered, between 50% and 64%, with
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exeption
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exception
 of Latvia, where only 68% of
population
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the population
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were
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was
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 employed. Looking at high education statistics, Portugal observed the lowest level, with slightly less than a quarter of
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the total
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polulation
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population
,
while
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 in the rest of the shown
regions
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regions,
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 the numbers were approximately 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ten with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Higher education attainment
  • Correlation
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Policy implications
  • Gender differences
  • Youth employment
  • Age-segmented
  • Statistics
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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