The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
The given figure depicts the manufacturing
levels
of the primary types of fuel in
UK
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the UK
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from the years 1981 to 2000 .
Overall
, it has been observed that petroleum is manufactured more from the
inital
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initial
year onwards when
as
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at the start of the year coal is produced more than
the
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natural
gas
but years later natural
gas
has surpassed the manufacturing
levels
of coal .
Initially
,
UK
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the UK
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produced 90 million tonnes of petroleum in the year 1981 and the
levels
has raised
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rose
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continuously till 1984 and became stable till 1987 and saw
decline
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a decline
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in
further
years but from 1991 it
has
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had
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a slight increase and rose dramatically and never
seen
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saw
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a decline .
On the other hand
, coal was manufactured
80
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million tonnes in 1981 and natural
gas
is
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produced
only
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around 40 million tonnes but production
levels
of coal
has
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have
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declined rapidly in
such
a way that the
levels
of coal and natural
gas
are
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were
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equal
at
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in
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1984 . From
then
onwards natural
gas
is produced more than coal
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • extraction technology
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  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
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