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Band 3.5

the diagram illustrates how recycled papers is made

the diagram illustrates how recycled papers is made
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The graph depicted below illustrates how recycled
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papers
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paper
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 is made, there are four steps to get a successful recycling paper process,
firstly
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, combining water and chemicals to get an acidic solution,
secondly
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, Filtering, Filtered Pulp,
this
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 will get rid of all the unwanted atoms and substances. Cleaning, cleaning, cleaning the Ink and the Pulp to get
a pure
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a pure paper
pure papers
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papers
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 with no damages and it is the
semi final
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semi-final
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 stage of recycling
papers
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.
Finally
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, after cleaning and recycling the
papers
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this
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we
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 will get
us
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apply
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a
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apply
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pure paper as a byproduct. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that recycling
papers
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 is a
high intensity
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high-intensity
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, sensitive procedure and must done with
a professional workers
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professional workers
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 to make the best quality of paper with no risks to take because any mistake could possibly lead to a disaster.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words papers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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