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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #newspapers
These days,
newspapers
 are becoming less used with the advent of the internet.
While
 it is true that
newspapers
 have a
have a
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less convenient online version, the world has some
people
 who have not read paper
newspapers
 yet.   On the one hand, the internet is developing day by day. All information, like books,
newspapers
, and magazines, is now in electronic form. Because these are more convenient and less expensive.
Moreover
,
instead
 of
newspapers
,
people
 get used to informing everyone through social media, as it is the fastest way.
Hence
, the number of
people
 who read
newspapers
 is falling.
For example
, research conducted by Stanford University shows that 70% of students do not read
newspapers
 because of their low speed of information.
Therefore
,
people
 may think that they are old-fashioned.    
On the other hand
, we still have individuals who actually read
newspapers
. Some of them remained at the top of their popularity. The magazines about fashion, sport, politics, art and business are still in high demand.
For instance
, the Vogue and Forbes
newspapers's
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 the highest among all.
Moreover
, despite a decline in the mid-2000s, Americans are still seeking news from
newspapers
. An estimated 20.9 million print and digital
newspapers
 were in daily circulation.
Thus
, certain
newspapers
 with a new style have far more fame compared to some social media.     In conclusion,
although
 the fame of
newspapers
 decreased steeply, we cannot ensure that they are a thing of the past.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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