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Band 6.5

The diagram below shows the change, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007.

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The maps illustrate how a coastal
area
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,
which
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whose
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 name is Pentland,
has
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apply
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developed between 1950 to 2007.
Overall
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, the
area
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 has experienced some major changes in infrastructure throughout the period. As
it
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apply
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can be seen in 1950, there was a main path which connected the South to the North of the
area
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. On the left hand of the main
road
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, there was an industrial
area
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 which was on the Northwest of the city.
Moreover
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, to the South of the industrial
area
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, there was a grassland and
also
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 across the
road
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, there was one more grassland.
In addition
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, to the North of the
area
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, there was a sea which split the main
road
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 in two.
Finally
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, there was a car park on the East of the map. Turning to the map
that
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apply
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in 2007, the main
road
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has been
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was
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expended
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expanded
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the
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from the
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 Southwest to
Southeast
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the Southeast
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.
Also
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,
grassland
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the grassland
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 has been replaced by the shops,the houses and the cinema.
Additinonally
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Additionally
, a swimming pool and a park, which are connected
each
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to each
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 other, have been established
on
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in
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 the Northwest of the
area
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. To the Northeast of the map, the apartments
has
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have
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 been built.
Lastly
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, the sea has been
expended
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expanded
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 with a marina.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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