The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given bar charts depict the percentage of students from the age 14 to 16 learn a
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second
languages
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in an
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national
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and
three
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most common second languages in 1984 and 2007. Looking at an
overall
perpectively
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perspective
,it is readily
apperant
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apparent
that the girls' proportion was higher than the boys' counterpart.
Additionally
,the chunk of both
female
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and
male
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decreased slightly.In the second chart,French and German experienced a decline
whereas
Spanish increased rapidly.
To begin
with,
girls'
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rate
was approximately 49% in 1984 but the
rate
tended to go down in 2007 accounting for 40%.
Moreover
,
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percentage faced
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the
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similar trend
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the females' chunk.To be more clear,in 1984 boys'
rate
stood at 30%
then
declined to nearly 25% in 2007. Turning to the remaining chart,French was the most dominant
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which reached 50% in total.
However
,in 2007 French plummeted around 23% in 2007.In terms of
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Germany
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,the
rate
slumped from 20% in 1984 to 10% in 2007.
By contrast
with French and German,Spanish experienced a two-fold increase from 2% up to 10% in 1984 and 2007 respectively.
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