The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14- to 16- year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages.

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14- to 16- year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages.
The given bar charts illustrate the amount of students who learning a foreign language and the majority of languages from 1984 to 2007.
Overall
, it can be observed that the first bar chart shows most of the girls from 14 to 16 years old study languages more than the boys. Other charts,
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the wide range of languages that students spend much time studying. Regarding the first chart, which showed a decrease in the number of students.
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, it dropped gradually between nearly 48% and 40% from 1984 to 2007. Meanwhile, the percentage of boys decreased sharply from 30% to approximately 25%
at the
end
of the period. Take a look at the other graphs, which France
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the most at the beginning with 50%
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nearly 22%. About Germany, it decreased gradually from 20% to 12% by the
end
of the period.
Likewise
, Spanish saw an increase and reached approximately 10%
at the
end
.
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