The chart below shows places visited by different peopleliving in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart gives information about the kinds of leisure activity engaged in by three distinct groups: native Australians, recently arrived immigrants from

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English-speaking

countries and new

migrants

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from whom

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is not the first language in their country. The cinema is by far the most popular free-time activity listed in the chart for those with

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as their first language -70% of non-

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and 65% of

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-speaking

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. Half the

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from non-

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-speaking countries

also

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go to see a film but interestingly, 5% more of

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group prefer the library to the cinema. Roughly 40% of the other two groups say they visit the library. Zoos are visited most by half of the

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-speaking

migrants

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compared to just over 40% of those born in Australia and approximately 35% of the

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born where

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is not widely spoken. The theatre is least popular for all concerned, with only 10% of non-

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-speaking

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attending,

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double the number of native Australians go to see a play. A quarter of those born in

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-speaking countries are theatre-goers.

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, it is perhaps unsurprising that Australians prefer the cinema to the theatre, but the popularity of the library with new

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may reflect the financial circumstances of these new citizens.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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