The chart below shows places visited by different peopleliving in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows places visited by different peopleliving in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the kinds of leisure activity engaged in by three distinct groups: native Australians, recently arrived immigrants from
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English-speaking
countries and new
migrants
from whom
English
is not the first language in their country. The cinema is by far the most popular free-time activity listed in the chart for those with
English
as their first language -70% of non-
migrants
and 65% of
English
-speaking
migrants
. Half the
migrants
from non-
English
-speaking countries
also
go to see a film but interestingly, 5% more of
this
group prefer the library to the cinema. Roughly 40% of the other two groups say they visit the library. Zoos are visited most by half of the
English
-speaking
migrants
compared to just over 40% of those born in Australia and approximately 35% of the
migrants
born where
English
is not widely spoken. The theatre is least popular for all concerned, with only 10% of non-
English
-speaking
migrants
attending,
while
double the number of native Australians go to see a play. A quarter of those born in
English
-speaking countries are theatre-goers.
Overall
, it is perhaps unsurprising that Australians prefer the cinema to the theatre, but the popularity of the library with new
migrants
may reflect the financial circumstances of these new citizens.
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