The bar graph shows the number of man and woman participants in the olympics between 1924 to 2012

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The given bar chart illustrates how many people participated in the Olympics, categorised by gender from 1924 to 2012.

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, it can be seen that there was an obvious upward trend during the timeframe. It is

also

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noticeable that the year 2012 had the biggest number of participants,

as well as

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the proportion of men outnumbered that of women. Looking at the men's figure, it

initially

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stood at exactly 3000 at its first appearance in 1924,

then

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gradually doubled to over 5000 in 1984, along reached its peak of approximately 6000 in 2012 ending the timeframe. Regarding the remaining gender, in the beginning, women accounted for just over 100, which had a significant gap with men.

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, it constantly increased to 500 and precisely 1500 in the years 1952 and 1984, respectively. In comparison to the beginning, there was a dramatic rise seen in its number, presenting nearly 5000, which was more than 2 times compared with 1984.

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Topic Vocabulary:

gender ratio
inclusion
significant gap
gradual increase
key Olympics
notable increase
policy changes
closing gender gap
socio-political factors
feminist movements
gender equality
parity

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The bar graph shows the number of man and woman participants in the olympics between 1924 to 2012

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In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around.

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