Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food nowadays. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

Many
people
prefer restaurant
food
than
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to
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cooking at home
however
I believe it has more disadvantages than advantages.
This
essay will first demonstrate eating outside has disadvantages like wasting more money and eating unhealthy
food
, followed by an analysis of how the primary advantages, namely
saves
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time
,
is
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are
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not valid. The main reason to start is
people
spend a
lot
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lot of
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cash when they are out on
food
. Nowadays,
people
think that when they are with friends or family they just don't want to eat at home they try to order
food
from any famous restaurants and they will go
any
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to any
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eatery
place
.
Moreover
fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
have more
sideffects
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side effects
.
In other words
, eating
junkfood
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junk food
is
calling
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causing
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more diseases in your body like obesity. when you eat any outside
food
you are not aware
what
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of what
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are the ingridients they use
while
making
food
some of you
ahve
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are
allergic to
that
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the
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materials they use and when the
food
was
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is
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cooked. For
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instance
, there are
lot
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a lot
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of restaurants
are having
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that have
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bad reviews that
they
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apply
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use
food
colour to make
dish
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dishes
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brighter and
looks
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look
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delisious
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delicious
. even one of the famous
restaurant
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restaurants
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in India
were
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was
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in the news
a
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for a
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while
for making
food
in the
moring
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morning
for serving them at night and because of that
lot
of
people
face
food
posioning
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poisoning
. Those who
opposed
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oppose
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to
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apply
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this
say it saves your
time
when you have
group
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a group
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of
prople
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people
at your home.
Additionally
, some
people
believe that when you have
guest
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guests
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at your
place
you should rather order
food
from any
place
so that you can spend more
time
with your friends or family members. Once I visited my aunt's
place
she
order
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ordered
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food
for 2 days so that no one
have
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had
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yo
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to
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go
in
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to
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the kitchen and make
food
everybody
can
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play together and enjoy. In conclusion, Eating outside can waste your money and
invite
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cause
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a
lot
of
disease
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diseases
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in your body has more disadvantages than just saving
time
.
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