The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the statistics regarding
Australians
employee Correct your spelling
Australian
number
in the previous year, categorized Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
in
occupation type and gender. Change preposition
by
Overall
, it can be seen that males percentage outnumbered females in all categories, excepting
for professionals and clerical.
Wrong verb form
except
To begin
with, the majority of male
worked in Fix the agreement mistake
males
Correct article usage
the trades
trades
field Change the noun form
trade
at
about 900 Change preposition
apply
people
, nine times over female
in Fix the agreement mistake
females
this
sector. Clerical ranked in second place with roughly 850 people
. while
other types showed average
Change the article
an average
the average
number
of 550 people
, labourers experienced the lowest figure for male worker
, representing only 400 Fix the agreement mistake
workers
people
.
Regarding women employee
, it witnessed the highest Fix the agreement mistake
employees
number
in the clerical, just under 1,000 people
. Followed closely by professionals at exactly 700 people
. The remaining displayed less number
compared to men. While
semi-professionals, Labourers, and managers saw figures between 200 and 400, tradespeople and production were the two least field
Australian women work in. It shared Fix the agreement mistake
fields
similar
Change the article
a similar
the similar
number
of 100 people
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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