The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a 

European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The diagram shows how many different kinds of meat and fish were consumed in a country in Europe from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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,
although
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beef was the most popular type of meat at
first,
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it was replaced by chicken towards the end of the survey.
In contrast
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, fish remained the least significant throughout the period. In the first year, beef was the most popular with a consumption of about 225 grams per person per week.
Then
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,
this
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figure experienced a sudden plunge of 50 before surging to about 230 in 1984.
Following
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this
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, there were some fluctuations until 1989, after which it decreased dramatically to around half as high as its original level in 2004. The figure for lamb was
initially
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almost as high as that for chicken (around 150 grams per person per week).
However
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,
while
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the former declined gradually and significantly as it reached approximately 60 in the
last
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year, the latter saw considerable growth and outstripped beef consumption in 1989, peaking at 250 in 2004. Fish consumption was originally approximately 60 and experienced a small fall of about 10 over the period
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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