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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house than buy one. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a property?

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In the modern era, anything can be rented
such
 as houses, cars and bikes.
Similarly
,
this
 is becoming common in
the
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most countries to rent a
place
for living
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 rather than
purchasing
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 a property.
However
, there are certain pros and cons of
this
 situation that I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with the benefits, renting a house is less expensive than buying one.
For instance
,
although
 individuals have to pay extra for utilities
such
 as electricity, gas and water bills, it is still cheaper than buying their own homes. In the example, a study has published that , in the USA, the number of people living in
the
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rented apartments
are
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 more compared to those who prefer to own their houses because of cheap rents.
Consequently
, people do not need to save an immense amount of money to purchase their own lands.
However
, despite having some advantages, there are certain drawbacks. First of all, shifting from one
place
 to another is difficult.
For example
, when tenants choose a
place
 to stay
then
 they have to sign a lease
that is
 usually for a year or sometimes less than that.
Therefore
, after a year, they have to move from
that
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one
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 apartment to another which becomes a problem. In fact, sometimes,
while
 moving, since they lose certain things, they have to invest again to buy
for
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lost items.
As a result
, renting can be a hassle for some as it is for only fixed timing. In conclusion, though there are certain positive aspects of renting a
place
, it is worth less when you have to pay again for
your
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 things that you have lost
while
 shifting.
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Your introduction effectively sets the stage for discussing the advantages and disadvantages of renting, which shows good task achievement. Enhancing the depth and variety in your examples could further strengthen your response.
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Try to expand on your ideas with more detailed examples and explanation to fully address the task.
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Your essay has a good logical structure and coherent flow between paragraphs. Keep this up in your writing.
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Introduce more linking words and phrases to improve the smoothness of transitions between your ideas.
coherence cohesion
In discussing advantages and disadvantages, ensure that both sides are equally elaborated upon to maintain a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
You effectively introduced the topic and provided a clear thesis statement in your introduction.
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You maintained a logical progression of ideas making your essay easy to follow.
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The conclusion succinctly summarizes the main points of your essay, reinforcing your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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