You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Writing a letter to the course director at the cookery school.In your letter . describe what you enjoyed about the course . say how much cooking you have done since the course . suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear

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erwin I am writing

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letter to regard that i ever take a cookery

course

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the university

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university

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University Tristan

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tristan

of Indonesia, i will give feedback during we take

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course

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university

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University Tristan

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tristan

First of all, when

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was still a student at

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fell

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happy about

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study

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tutor

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fast get it when my

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about

cook

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he always give motivation for all

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members and we

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practice cooking in the kitchen

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was a student

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challenge

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to make several food

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me.

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beef and fruit salad I hope you join

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becouse

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because

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area, and much practice in the kitchen, please if you

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join

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you can tell me. I look forward to hearing from you yours

sincenery

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sincerely

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Grammar and Punctuation

Consider revising grammar and punctuation errors for clarity and professionalism.

Spelling and Capitalization

Use correct spellings and ensure proper capitalization of words for a polished letter.

Structure

Organize your ideas more clearly with distinct paragraphs for each topic.

Closing

Add a more specific closing to your letter to make it more personalized and professional.

Content Detailed

Try to elaborate more on your suggestions for future courses to fully complete the task requirement.

Personal Experience

You shared your personal experience and enjoyment of the course, which makes your feedback valuable.

Engagement

You suggested ideas for future courses, showing engagement with the school's offerings.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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177 words

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