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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The two maps
illustrates
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 the
norbiton
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Norbiton
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area
 in the present
days
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day
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,
as well as
, the planned development.
Overall
, the
norbiton
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Norbiton
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 industrial
area
 is located
at
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on
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 the east side of the town, with a river on the north, separating the farmland from the industrial
area
, which is located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
, represented by a few factory
biuldings
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buildings
 and roads, followed by the main road at the extreme south of the
map
. the planned development shows
a
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apply
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substantially
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 growth and modifications of the
overall
 infrastructure of the
area
 between the farmland and the main road.
Firstly
, the planned development of the
norbiton
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Norbiton
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area
 replaces what once were factories for
housings
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housing
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.
Moreover
, the roads have been developed to
acomodate
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accommodate
 all the new
biuldings
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buildings
 that have been planned for the
area
, which are, a school and a playground to the east side of the roundabout located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
,
as well as
 shops and a medical
center
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centre
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 around the
round about
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roundabout
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.
Secondly
, a bridge is planned for the north of the
map
 to cross the river and provide
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access
acess
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access
 to the housing that will be located
in
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on
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 farmland
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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