The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph illustrates
illiteracy
rates
according to
gender in selected nations from
previous
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year.
Overall
, the highest
illiteracy
rates
was
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experienced by South Asia countries
while
the lowest was in developed countries.
Moreover
, female's
illiteracy
rates
exceeded male's in every region presented. In detail, a huge gap
of
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illiteracy
rates
occurred in South Asia in which the percentage of women who could not read was approximately 60%,
meanwhile
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the
male's
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was only 35%. The same situation
also
occurred in three different regions, which were East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa and Arab States. The
female dominated
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the
illiteracy
rates
with a big difference, more or less than 20%.
On the other hand
,
two
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regions used to have more
balance
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illiteracy
rates
, which were very similar between men and women.
For example
,
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the female's
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female's
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female
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illiteracy
rate in Latin America was about 11% and
male's
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was only 10%.
In addition
,
the
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people who lived in developed countries almost 100% could read, both male and female.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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