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The table below gives information about the value (NZ$) of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.

The table below gives information about the value (NZ$) of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.
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The given table illustrates the financial impact of overseas sales of Kiwi fruit in New Zealand
dollars
 between 2010 and 2012. The general overview here is that, over time, from 2010 to 2012, the proportion of shipments was higher in Japan.
In contrast
, from 2010 to 2012, the ratio of outbound trade, was different in each country,
such
 as
Mexico
,
Russia
, and
Saudi
Arabia
.
According to
 the data, in the country group between Japan and China from 2010 to 2012, it was essential to first note that the number of international sales was elite at 271,000,000, 287,000,000, and 325,300,000
million
dollars
;
additionally
, the allocation of second export trade was 74,900,000, 84,800,000, and 94,000,000
million
dollars
.
Furthermore
, in 2010,
Saudi
Arabia
's outbound commerce totalled 29
million
,
as well as
Mexico
 was outward shipments totalled a
million
 and two hundred
dollars
,
In addition
,
Russia
 was foreign trade totalled nine hundred sixty-eight. In fact, In 2011,
Mexico
's merchandise abroad totalled 2.4
million
dollars
, indeed,
Russia
 was overseas exports totalled 1.5
million
dollars
, identically,
Saudi
Arabia
's merchandise abroad totalled a hundred and six thousand
dollars
,
also
, In 2012,
Mexico
 was outward shipments totalled 3
million
dollars
, and
Russia
 was overseas exports totalled 2.4
million
, in conclusion,
Saudi
Arabia
 merchandised abroad totalled 82 thousands.
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