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Some people believe that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital Era as all writings can be stored electronically. Other think that printed books still play an important role. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some
people
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 that we are no longer in need
for
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hardcopy
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books
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, in
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 digital
Era
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era
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 as all writings can be stored and read in an electronic form.
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,
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 other
people
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 believe that printed
books
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 still
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 a crucial role in our
dialy
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daily
 lives. In my opinion, I think it is better to read an actual
book
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 rather than in a softcopy form. First and foremost, digital
books
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 can be easily accessed
throught
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through
 any electronic platform
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 as
,
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 cell phones, laptops,
Ipads
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ipads
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 and e-
books
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.
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 the way
people
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 read and
also
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 played a significant role in encouraging young adults to read more.
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,
beside
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 the high cost to
puchase
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purchase
 an electronic device. Pyschatries
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meintioned
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mentioned
 that reading through an electronic platform can make youth easily
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 track and
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 can reduce their
conncentration
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concentration
 level.
Moreover
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,
instead
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 of reading and understanding the text written in the
book
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 they just tend to skim and scan.
Secondly
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, most of
old
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 generation prefer to read
books
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 as a
hardcopy
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, as they believe that reading an actual solid
book
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give
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 you the
spirite
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spirit
 of reading compared to any other form of reading.
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,
certain
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book
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 has
it's
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its
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 own value and can not be found
through
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. In 2015 Khartoum
school
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School
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 for
girls
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Girls
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, carried a research, dividing a certain number of students into
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the group
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group
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groups
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, who use the electronic library and others who read in the ordinary library
at the end
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 of the year the
student
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students
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 who used to read
books
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 from the library shows a higher level of academic
preformance
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performance
 compared to other students. In conclusion, both methods of reading have advantages and drawbacks. To give a clear example, digital
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book
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books
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 can at some point be expensive to get.
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,
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hardcopy
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books
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 can be cheaper to afford and can increase the level of alertness in the brain and help students to focus more
in
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on
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 achieving the best academic levels. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 really prefer reading
hardcopy
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books
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 because
people
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 can benefit more from reading
it
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them
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.

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sentence structure
Consider varying your sentence structure more to enhance readability and interest. Try incorporating complex sentences and different conjunctions.
development of ideas
To strengthen your argument, try integrating more specific examples or data to support your points. This will add depth to your essay and make your arguments more convincing.
typographical
Pay attention to typos and minor grammatical errors to improve the overall quality of your essay. A thorough proofreading session can significantly elevate your writing.
balance of discussion
While discussing both views, ensure to dedicate equal development to each perspective before stating your opinion. This balanced approach demonstrates critical examination of the topic.
introduction & conclusion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your essay.
task response
You've effectively discussed both viewpoints before giving your own opinion, which meets the task requirement.
coherence & cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical, with a clear progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next.
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