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IELTS The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton famous attractions in England from 1980 to 2010

IELTS The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton famous attractions in England from 1980 to 2010
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The liner graph provided displays the percentage of tourists who visited Brighton attractions (art gallery, pavilion,
pier
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 and festival) in England from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen the
number
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 of
people
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 visiting
pavilion
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the pavilion
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 outnumbered all other attractions.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of
people
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visting
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visiting
 Brighton
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pier
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Pier
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 was the
least
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lowest
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 among all,
however
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 during 2005 it exceeded the
number
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 of
people
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 going to art galleries. Regarding the most famous attractions among visitors, the percentage of
people
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 visiting the pavilion showed a significant increase of almost 25% from 1980 to 1995
then
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 it
follows
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followed
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 a downward trend reaching
to
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apply
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around 35% during 2000.
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Finally
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Finally,
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 it almost remained constant for the next 10 years.
On the other hand
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, from 1980
1985
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to 1985
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 visiting art
galeries
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galleries
 increased
steadly
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steadily
, following a steep decrease until it maintained a gradual drop. In terms of festivals and
pier
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, visitors going to
festivels
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festivals
 was constant.
while
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,
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apply
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of
people
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 going to
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pier beach
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Pier Beach
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 was
fluctating
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fluctuating
 over the whole period of time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pier, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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