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The bar chart below gives information about the sales of electric cars in china, Europe and the United States between 2016 and 2023.

The bar chart below gives information about the sales of electric cars in china, Europe and the United States between 2016 and 2023.
The bar chart illustrates the purchases of electric vehicles in three countries (China, Europe and the United States) from 2016 to 2023.
Overall
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, it can be seen that China has the highest sales in 2023,
while
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 it increased sharply by 2021 and reached its peak in 2023.
However
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, the United States always take the lowest proportion in each year and slightly rises from 2022. The percentage of how many sales of electric cars in China started at about 0.3
million
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 in 2016, slightly increased to 1
million
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 in 2020, and
then
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 got to the top point which is 8
million
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 in 2023.
Furthermore
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, Europe
also
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 gradually grew
up
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apply
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from 0.6
million
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 to 2.6
million
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 between 2020 and 2023. In terms of the United States's sales of electric vehicles, it
stay
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stayed
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 stable from 2016 to 2020 which is just about 0.5
million
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.
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, there was a climb in 2021 and reached its peak at 0.7
million
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 in 2023.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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