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The table shows price of a cup of coffee in six cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.

The table shows price of a cup of coffee in six cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.
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This
 table depicts how much a
cup
 of
coffee
 was in six distinctive urban areas in Australia, in 2010, and 2014.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
although
 in
this
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these
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 two
period
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given
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apply
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the
price
 of a
cup
 of
coffee
 increased dramatically, in Sydney and Melbourne prices changed considerably. For starters, in Perth in 2010,
a
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the
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 total amount of
cup
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cups
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 of
coffee
 was 3.70
dollars
,
however
, in 2014, it grew over 6.8
percent
 and turned to 3.95
dollars
. Canberra and Adelaide had the same rocket in the
price
 of
coffee
, both rocketed about 4.5
percent
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per cent
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. The highest changes in
price
 are for Melbourne and Sydney, in Melbourne a
cup
 of
coffee
 was a little above 3
dollars
 in 2010, after four years we can see it went up substantially over 9
percent
 and it was 3.45
dollars
. In Sydney individuals
payed
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paid
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 3.10
dollars
 for a
cup
 of
coffee
 in 2010,
while
 in 2014, they
payed
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paid
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 3.35
dollars
 for a
cup
 of
coffee
, it had
8.1
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an 8.1
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percent
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per cent
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 rise.In Brisbane there was
7.5
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a 7.5
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percent
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per cent
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 soar in
price
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the price
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 of a
cup
 of
coffee
, back in 2010 it was
approximetly
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approximately
 three and
half
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a half
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dollars
 but changed to 3.60 in 2014.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cup, coffee, price, dollars, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocket" was used 2 times.
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