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The table shows price of a cup of coffee in six cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.

The table shows price of a cup of coffee in six cities in Australia in 2010 and 2014.
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This
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 table depicts how much a
cup
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 of
coffee
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 was in six distinctive urban areas in Australia, in 2010, and 2014.
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,
it is clear that
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,
although
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this
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period
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given
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the
price
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 of a
cup
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 of
coffee
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 increased dramatically, in Sydney and Melbourne prices changed considerably. For starters, in Perth in 2010,
a
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the
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 total amount of
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cup
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cups
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 of
coffee
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 was 3.70
dollars
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,
however
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, in 2014, it grew over 6.8
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 and turned to 3.95
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. Canberra and Adelaide had the same rocket in the
price
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 of
coffee
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, both rocketed about 4.5
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percent
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. The highest changes in
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 are for Melbourne and Sydney, in Melbourne a
cup
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 of
coffee
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 was a little above 3
dollars
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 in 2010, after four years we can see it went up substantially over 9
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 and it was 3.45
dollars
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. In Sydney individuals
payed
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paid
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 3.10
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 for a
cup
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 of
coffee
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 in 2010,
while
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 in 2014, they
payed
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paid
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 3.35
dollars
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 for a
cup
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 of
coffee
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, it had
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an 8.1
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percent
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per cent
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 rise.In Brisbane there was
7.5
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a 7.5
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percent
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per cent
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 soar in
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price
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the price
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 of a
cup
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 of
coffee
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, back in 2010 it was
approximetly
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approximately
 three and
half
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a half
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dollars
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 but changed to 3.60 in 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cup, coffee, price, dollars, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocket" was used 2 times.
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