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The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.
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The bar graph illustrates the 65
years
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 old people of three nations Canada, Germany and the United
Kingdom
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 over the period of 50
years
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.
Overall
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,
Canada’s
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 community is increasing every
year
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 and is projected to rise in the coming
years
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. All national populations increasing and estimated the same trend will go on in the future as well,
in addition
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, the people growth of the United
Kingdom
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 is going to be low as compared to the other two countries. It is conspicuous that in the
year
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 1980
Canada’s
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 society of 65
years
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 gents was 10% of the total public of the nation
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, Germany was in the top position in the same
year
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 was 15% of the total culture of his nation,
whereas
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 the United
Kingdom
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 was second about 14% in the total of his state.
However
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, after a gap of 20
years
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 , in 2000
Canada’s
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 society rose to 15 % and a 20% rise in Germany’s public,
whereas
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 the United
Kingdom
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’s population was 15% with a slight growth of about 2%. Probing ahead, it is predicted in the
year
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 2030
Canada’s
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 people will gain dramatically by about 22% Germany will be on a steady rise of 25% in the same
year
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,
while
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 the United
Kingdom
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 will touch 18% in the same
year
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, kingdom, canada’s, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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