The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.
The bar graph illustrates the 65
years
old people of three nations Canada, Germany and the United
Kingdom
over the period of 50
years
.
Overall
,
Canada’s
community is increasing every
year
and is projected to rise in the coming
years
. All national populations increasing and estimated the same trend will go on in the future as well,
in addition
, the people growth of the United
Kingdom
is going to be low as compared to the other two countries. It is conspicuous that in the
year
1980
Canada’s
society of 65
years
gents was 10% of the total public of the nation
in addition
, Germany was in the top position in the same
year
was 15% of the total culture of his nation,
whereas
the United
Kingdom
was second about 14% in the total of his state.
However
, after a gap of 20
years
, in 2000
Canada’s
society rose to 15 % and a 20% rise in Germany’s public,
whereas
the United
Kingdom
’s population was 15% with a slight growth of about 2%. Probing ahead, it is predicted in the
year
2030
Canada’s
people will gain dramatically by about 22% Germany will be on a steady rise of 25% in the same
year
,
while
the United
Kingdom
will touch 18% in the same
year
.
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