The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003.
The given graph illustrates the proportion of
retirement
age of males and females in six countries in the year 2003.
Overall
, the highest number
of retirement
age on males was in Korea
and
followed by France as the lowest. Correct word choice
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On
other
hand, the highest Correct article usage
the other
number
of retirement
age on
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was
Korea
while
the lowest was France
.
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in France
To begin
with, Korea
became first ranked in the number
of retirement
ages in male gender with 68 years
and 8 months
and
followed by Japan in Correct word choice
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the
second ranked with 67 Correct article usage
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years
and 4 months
. After that, other countries such
as United
States, Australia, and Italy were ranked sequentially in Correct article usage
the United
third,
fourth and fifth position
in the number
of retirement
ages with 65 years
and 7 months
for the United States, 64 years
and 1 month for Australia, and Italy with 58 years
and 2 months
.
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the other hand, the Change preposition
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top-ranked
number
of retirement
ages in female gender was Korea
with 67 years
and 2 months
and Japan was in the second position
with 66 years
and 9 months
. For the next position
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were
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was
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States with 64 Correct article usage
the United
years
and 2 months
for the third position
, Australia as
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position
with 63 years
and 5 months
, and Italy in fifth
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the fifth
position
with 57 years
and 3 months
. Meanwhile, the latest ranked was France with 56 years
and 9 months
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