The given two graphs provide data on the number of participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012, divided by gender and the total number of people.

The given two graphs provide data on the number of participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012, divided by gender and the total number of people.
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The line graph and bar charts illustrate the
number
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of men and women
athletes
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who participated in the Olympic games between 1924 and 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that over the
last
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88 years ago not only the
number
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of competitors was increased but
also
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male
athletes
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were the dominant
group
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in comparison to sportswomen. First of all, in 1924 the
number
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of people who participated in the Olympics was about 3000 where sportsmen had a 99% share of
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number
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and female
athletes
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had the lowest
number
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of
participants
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. Over the next 60 years, the
number
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of Olympic competitors increased gradually and reached more than double, about 7000
participants
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, in total. From 1984 to 2012, the
number
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of
athletes
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experienced a dramatic rise where it saw six in ten per cent growth in the
number
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of
participants
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and reached its peak. Second of all, over
this
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period the
number
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of men Olympic
athletes
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dominated over the female
group
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and
this
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amount increased gradually from 3000 to 6000
participants
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which doubled in total.
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, females had the lowest
number
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from 1924 to 1984 in comparison to the male
group
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.
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, between 1984 and 2012
this
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rate experienced a 3000 skyrocket in growth where it stood with only 1500 sportswomen less than the male
group
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in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, athletes, group, participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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