The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The graph compares changes in the percentage of city dwellers in four countries in Asia, namely the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia, over a 30-year period. It
also
makes predictions for the next two decades.
Overall
, the proportion has noticeably increased in all four countries and is set to
further
increase, though at varying rates. Throughout most of the period, the highest proportion of people living in cities can be found in Malaysia, currently accounting for about three-quarters of the total inhabitants.
This
number is expected to rise by about 5% over the next 20 years.
However
, the Philippines has seen a different trend: after an initial growth in 1990 to 50% of the population, there was a moderate fall to 40% by 2010. Since
then
the indicator of city dwellers has recovered and is predicted to climb gradually to around 55% by 2040. Indonesia has experienced a gradual but quite dramatic rise in the proportion of people living in cities since 1970, overtaking that of both Thailand (in 2000) and the Philippines (in 2008). It is forecast to continue increasing at a rapid pace.
Finally
, there has been a steady rise in the figure for urban dwellers in Thailand, but there is likely to be a surge between 2020 and 2040, reaching around 45% by that date and having the lowest percentage of all four countries.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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